Part of me choosing this piece was how detailed her writing was. I really wanted to work on bringing more detail into my personal writing. I feel as if her writing greatly helped me with mine. understanding all the different ways to use it on the simplest things showed how easy i can be if you put your mind to it.






I read the essay How to Make a Snow-Cone by Julie Melby. The essay started off with a weird twist. The very first sentence was “First don’t kill anyone” (298). It never crossed my mind that a snow-cone was something you would have to worry about killing someone with. Was it the stress of building a perfect snow-cone which would make you want to kill someone? This was the first though that went through my head. As I continued on in my reading I realized it was describing the things that could go wrong in making a snow-cone. She went on to describe all the little things that went into the snow-cone. I like that it was brought up that not all flavors were equal. She took something as basic as making a snow-cone and really went into depth. There were many descriptive words, which allowed me as a read to vividly imagination what was going on. There was a passage about half way through the essay that talked about how to handle when the snow-cone came out not so perfect. I really enjoy the idea of taking something so simple and describing it in such detail. Although I feel this may be a struggle for me. Choosing the process analysis essay for my final paper, I believe, will significantly help me. This essay will push me to find and use those descriptive words I have not become accustom to using…….yet.